I am currently a 3rd year undergraduate in the National University of Singapore (NUS), pursuing a Bachelor degree in Chemistry. I participate actively in my faculty activities. In 2006, I displayed my leadership skills by joining the Science Sports Committee as Vice-Director (Programme) and led a team of 12 in the organization of a 3D2N Science Sports Camp, “SWEAT”, which had 100 participants. Besides my contribution in the university, I am also the secretary of Zheng Ensemble and the Vice-President for the concert committee. I have been playing the Guzheng for ten years under the guidance of renowned local Guzheng instructor, Mr Tan Chin Huat and am currently pursuing my diploma.
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Hi Jia Hwa. I thought that it was good that you were selective in what you wrote in your biodata. You presented two aspects of yourself namely your leadership experiences and your musical talent. I thought that would help others to see you as all-rounded person.
Perhaps you might want to add a personal touch to your biodata by including your interests and hobbies so that others can see the relaxed side of you.
Hi Jia Hwa, I agree with Peng Siang. You should try to bring out your personality when writing about your activities. For example, how about saying that being in Sports Committee showed your active outlook towards life? And maybe you should say something like playing the guzheng made you a more refined person. Try to show softer qualities of yourself when writing about your capabilities.
Hi Jia Hwa, it was good to include some personal qualities that you have like your musical talents and your leadership skills in your biodata. However, you can add more of your personal traits like you are a cheerful person, etc..Nevertheless,it was a good job to concise everything into a 100 words biodata.The biodata also shows that you are a multi-talented person.
Oh boy, it seemed that this week assignment is so short that I have nothing much to critique since everyone already commented on the same thing! (Or maybe your bio-data is so good that it is difficult to find fault!)
Well, I guess I'm not going to repeat what the rest said about how you could add in some interest of yours. Oh wait, I just did! Darn!
Maybe, you could add in how studying Chemistry mould you as a person or change your way of thinking. Or you could add why you choose to study Chemistry.
hey Jia Hwa,
Nice to know more about you through this post. I never know that there could be people who are passionate about Chinese instrument. Well, this shows my lack of interest in chinese instrument. Anyway, thanks for sharing with us your passion in music too!!
hey Jia Hwa,
Nice to know more about you through this post. I never know that there could be people who are passionate about Chinese instrument. Well, this shows my lack of interest in chinese instrument. Anyway, thanks for sharing with us your passion in music too!!
Sorry, tt prof comment is mine..
Hello Jiahwa, after reading your biodata, it is clear that you are a competent leader by nature. I find it promising to read that you also participate actively in activites out of varsity. Your strong interest and pursuit of a diploma in Guzheng shows your musical talents and also your ability to manage your time well between school work and personal commitments. Perhaps, to keep your biodata even more concise, you could leave out certain details which would not further enhance your biodata such as “3D2N” and “SWEAT”. Small details, but by excluding a few of these could help save on some words to include other important details. Other than that, great job!
Are we supposed to show the objective of the biodata and the future career we wish to pursue?
It is really challenging to put everything in a short paragraph of 100 words. I think your biodata has sufficient information about you which includes your personality,interest, studies, CCAs and experiences. Though peng siang suggested to include interests and hobbies, I feel that your hobby is to play Guzheng, right?
I agree with Brandon that you could have left out some details so that you can include other interesting information. You could also have used acronymns like NUS or think of ways to make your sentences more concise eg. I'm a 3rd year NUS undergraduate majoring in Chemistry. (9 words as opposed to 20 words in your sentence) Remember this is one of the 7Cs of effective communication :-)
Anyway, thanks for sharing your biodata with us. I didn't realise till now that you're quite a leader and a musician!
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